Re: 7.4 release news item on postgresql.org
От | Robert Treat |
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Тема | Re: 7.4 release news item on postgresql.org |
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Msg-id | 1070564944.25244.11787.camel@camel обсуждение исходный текст |
Ответ на | Re: 7.4 release news item on postgresql.org (Josh Berkus <josh@agliodbs.com>) |
Список | pgsql-advocacy |
While you guys are at it, can you write up something for 7.3.5 which was released today... Robert Treat On Thu, 2003-12-04 at 13:38, Josh Berkus wrote: > Merlin, > > > Here are my suggestions: > > The first sentence is a non sequitur. It states postgres was released > > due to having a large number of enterprise features, while the intended > > meaning is to imply a long testing period. > > The word 'enterprise' should not be in quotes because it does not > > normally appear in quotes. Quotation marks imply a user inferred > > meaning that differs from the normal one. In this case it implies > > triteness (at least to me). > > The personal pronoun 'our' does not belong here. > > 'Click download links above to download it' is better stated as 'The new > > version is available in the download section' (perhaps with a 'located > > above' tacked on to the end). > > Thanks, but a critique doesn't do us much good if you don't supply alternate > text. How about you just re-write the paragraph and I'll post it? > > -- > -Josh Berkus > Aglio Database Solutions > San Francisco > > > ---------------------------(end of broadcast)--------------------------- > TIP 4: Don't 'kill -9' the postmaster -- Build A Brighter Lamp :: Linux Apache {middleware} PostgreSQL
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